I like the word choices you provided in blog post number one. It was very clear and I could understand what you were trying to explain and I enjoyed the whole blog post. When reading it I could tell you spent some time trying to make it. Maybe there are a bit of grammar errors but I could see that you had a great explanation. I like the fact that you know what you're talking about and the vocabulary was really good. I can see you put your good work to make this a great blog post! If I were someone who hasn't read the Giver book yet, this would be a great help because it shows your opinion and information of the book. You did very well with this blog post and you showed that you put effort into the post.

The only thing need to be improved is the fact that you made two paragraphs with the same information so if I were you, what I would do, is add the paragraphs into one, or make another paragraph about other information. For example, one paragraph is saying, NO my life shouldn't be decided for me the second saying, My parents chose also for me and the third saying, my life is my choice. That is the only thing I would suggest you fix. Other than that you did a good job with the passages.

GREAT JOB!!! :)


For blog post number two, this is very good. You changed exactly what was needed to be changed in the first blog post. Each paragraph had different information because the first paragraph was the explanation of what happened in the book, the second paragraph had your opinion about the fact that Jonas could see color. The last paragraph was about the last information that you might have not included in the first paragraph. You did well on the first blog post but this is MUCH better and I wouldn't change anything about it!!! Nice work, I can see you used your time properly to make this blog post!!!

ONCE AGAIN GREAT JOB!!! :)